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I
On the floor again, you say,
as the stone melts within my skin,
sticky and silent like butterflies.
You pushed me off my self
and ran rough fingers on my face,
You are beautiful, you say

so to the castle wall you laid me
to be loved until I broke apart.
Do tears burn your eyes, you ask,
they are beautiful,
just as an empire of stars,
I can almost see my self in there.

II
The queen opens the door again
and dances her way upstairs.
So hurry we must, you say
and love me too
before the world cages us.
You are beautiful and mine.

Sure the woman knows of it
but laughs her merry throat out.
Forgive me,
and they walked through my foolishness.
I will be back tomorrow, you say,
and on to the floor again.

III
So I thought
you’d be here by now.
©2005-2009 ~maning
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:iconemotionallydrained:
i like .. alot!! very good!!:heart:

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...one fish.. two fish..red fish.. blue fish...
:iconmaning:
thank you =)

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I love :sunnysideup:
:iconmngamojemo:
The rythm falters a little, in places (such as "so drag me you did to the castle wall"), and "the queen" isn't developed clearly. Other than that, I'm impressed. Poems of this caliber NEVER show up on the recent deviations.

The third section is absolutely perfect, and the italicized repetitions are, too. Definite :+fav:.

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If you donot see reflection you are on wrong side of mirror.
:iconemotionallydrained:
no problem.. ((go read my story..lol..and comment..lol))

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...one fish.. two fish..red fish.. blue fish...
:iconmaning:
thank you =) ill try to do something about it.

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I love :sunnysideup:
:iconmaning:
ok i will =)

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I love :sunnysideup:
:icondeathbyrainbow:
whoa. i totally love this. i just dont know why, i mean this peice speaks to me and is so artistic but i cant pinpoint only one reason why! so many amazing tactics!

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WARNING! : Walking love story!

~Photoshop-Whores
I LOVE TIM!

-dbr
:iconmaning:
thanks! :heart:

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I love :sunnysideup:
:icondeathbyrainbow:
no problem!

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WARNING! : Walking love story!

~Photoshop-Whores
I LOVE TIM!

-dbr

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